Cool, I would add a subtle instrument to go in some parts with the piano in the beginning, but you could easily make a full song with this idea (if this isn't already the full version haha)

This is a banger, good job! 🔥

I've listened to some of your songs and I think you deserved to be scouted so I scouted you! Personally, house is not my favourite genre (I prefer Dubstep) but you did a good job and on most of your other songs too! Congrats :)